Starting with 'but' and the long sentence create a contrast between the small places the hawk has previously lived in and the huge world that the hawk can see now. It shows the reader how amazing the bird's eyesight is and how much the bird loves freedom. Quote: 'a reptile, a fallen angel, a griffon.'Įffect on reader: Technique: long sentence starting with a conjunctionĮffect on reader: This sentence spans 5 lines and describes the scene from the hawks point of view. The choice of nouns makes the bird seem malevolent (a fallen angel is a devil) and fierce (a gryphon is mythical creature with the head of an eagle and the body of a lion). Quote:'She is a conjuring trick'Įffect on reader: Technique: listing of proper nounsĮffect on reader:using a list of different things gives the impression the writer is unsure of what to make of the hawk. It suggest the hawk isn't what the writer expected both in size and temperament. Quote: 'her feathers raised like the scattered quills of a fretful porcupine'Įffect on reader: The bird is compared to a magical illusion or trick. This creates the impression with the reader that the hawk is scared of the humans and wants to protect itself. Porcupines rain and rattle their quills to defend against an enemy. This creates the impression the bird is fluffed up, trying to make itself look bigger. Quote: 'the sharp fingers of her dark tipped primaries cutting the air'Įffect on reader: The bird's jagged feathers are compared to the spikes of a porcupine. This creates the impression that the hawk is fierce. The use of the word cutting makes the hawk's feathers seem sharp like knives. Effect on the reader: This description of the way her feathers and wings look and move creates a very clear picture in the readers mind.

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